Points in Conversation
Never allow the reader to be in doubt as to who is speaking. When he has to turn back to discover the speaker's identity, you may be sure there is something wrong with your construction. You need not quote the speaker's name in order to make it plain that he is speaking: all that is needed is a little attention to the "said James" and "replied Susan" of your dialogues. When once these two have commenced to talk, they can go on in catechism form for a considerable period. But if a third party chimes in, a more careful disposition of names is called for.
Beginners very often have a good deal of trouble with their "saids," "replieds," and "answereds."
Here, again, a little skilful manœvring will obviate the difficulty. This is a specimen of third-class style.
"I'm off on Monday," said he.
"Not really," said she.
"Yes, I have only come to say goodbye," said he.
"Shall you be gone long?" asked she.
"That depends," said he.