"The laving laurel turned my tide.">[
[Footnote 5: In this line the use of a needless antiquated form may be fairly questioned. In the revised form "win" is changed to "work.">[
[Footnote 6: "Barred" is changed to "did bar" in the revision—a doubtful gain.]
[Footnote 7: The preceding four lines show a decided poetic gain in the revised form:—
"And many a luminous jewel lone—
Crystals clear or a-cloud with mist,
Ruby, garnet, and amethyst—
Made lures with the lightnings of streaming stone.">[
[Footnote 8: The revised form, with an awkward pause after the first foot, and also a useless antiquated phrase, reads—
"Avail! I am fain for to water the plain.">[
[Footnote 9: Changed to "myriad of flowers.">[
[Footnote 10: "Final" was changed to "lordly" with fine effect. This poem challenges comparison with other pieces of similar theme. It lacks the exquisite workmanship of Tennyson's The Brook, with its incomparable onomatopoeic effects:—
"I chatter over stony ways,
In little sharps and trebles;
I bubble into eddying bays,
I babble on the pebbles."