Unemphatic. The city council is determined to stop jaywalking at the east entrance of the campus, and to attain this end has adopted a plan that calls for restricting pedestrians to clearly marked lanes that cross Clinton street at right angles.
Emphatic. The city council is determined to stop jaywalking at the east entrance to the campus. To attain this end, the council has adopted a plan that calls for restricting pedestrians to clearly marked lanes that cross Clinton street at right angles.
Revise. I used to think that sleeping accommodations at fraternity houses were inadequate, but I don’t now.
501. Divide a sentence that seems too long.
Repellant. The collections at the museum, which is the most important in the world, are in two divisions, one for the public and the other for the use of specialists, some of whom come from great distances to avail themselves of the unequalled collections set apart for their use.
Attractive. The collections at the museum, which is the most important in the world, are in two divisions, one for the public and the other for the use of specialists. Some specialists come from great distances to avail themselves of the unequalled collections set apart for their use.
Revise. That there will be no tolerance of laxity on the part of the freshmen concerning the observance of this decree was assured by the strong language of the order, which first pointed out that the wearing of the green cap by first year men was a college tradition and must be upheld, then explained that the wearing of the cap was left to the honor of every freshman, who was expected to purchase one and use it according to the rules of the past two years, which state that the cap must be worn every day until six o’clock at night, when it may be changed for the more common headgear.
502. Condense wordy sentences.
Meandering. At a recent meeting of the men’s glee club, it was decided to increase the membership of the organization from thirty-two men to forty men.