1. What about the indention?
2. What about the right-hand margin?
3. Should the speech of the mother be given a whole paragraph?
4. Is it possible to form more than one good paragraph of this thought? Why, or why not?
5. Does a break occur in the thought? Where?
6. Should anything be discarded? What?
7. Can you find a topic sentence, or must you compose one?
8. What about the arrangement of ideas?
9. Can you improve the links between sentences? How?
10. Can you give more prominence to significant ideas? How?