[Book I/Chapter IV]

“A wierd, low sound of song seemed to rise from” to weird.

[Book I/Chapter V]

“Yet not a murmer of pity or sorrow came from a single” to murmur.

“from a single breast in all the vast, silent, throng” delete comma after silent.

“Manco replied in a low, steady vaice” to voice.

[Book I/Chapter VI]

“the last of them had died away in a long, wailing, scream.” delete the comma after wailing.

[Book II/Chapter I]

“than when we started. and as for that green yonder” to And.