“she semed to float lazily like a creature” to seemed.
“to pretend to be shocked at the proceeding” to proceedings.
[CHAPTER XII]
“reviewed the emotions of the past night and tired to analyze them” to tried.
[CHAPTER XIII]
“Gervase move aside with him” to moved.
[CHAPTER XIV]
“Your ‘passion,’ you see, my friend awakens” add comma after friend.
(“Ah, there is the difficulty!” she said.) Merge with the paragraph that follows.
“like a Cleopatra, on any other old-world enchantress” to or.