“all the cowherds’ chidren came running out, when they saw the flag” to children.
“all the materials, necessary for the festival were immediately produced.” Delete the comma.
[Chapter LXIX]
“and all the Kuoruvùs rose haughtily and went to their homes” to Kouruvùs.
[Chapter LXXII]
“came Shree Krishnù Chund Jee; Wherever they encamped, a handsome” to wherever.
[Chapter LXXIII]
(I have still one desire.” Krishnù enquired, “What it is?”) to is it.
“the world has been deceived by your delusive power you behave towards us as a mortal” add exclamation mark after power.
“the money you have given me to whom shall I go now, and ask for more?” add comma after me.