The expression “floated to the center of consciousness” seems to imply an inspirational writing force, much as does Mrs. Pulver’s statement, “My crew will come to me ready named, ready behavioured” (see page 169).
The striking relation between Mr. Benefield’s original idea and his subsequently developed story is one of contrast. It is noteworthy that character dominates in each; incident is subordinate.
The Development. The principle of suggestion, by which this author has conveyed more than he could express, works powerfully. Observe the first effect created by the face of the sculptured Christ. “She noticed that the long white dress of the infant,” etc. (page 40). What are succeeding effects?
The Action. Miss Willett’s fortunes are in the descendant at the beginning of the story. Where do they take a turn? Is this dramatic climax motivated by the influence of the face? (“Yesterday you had nothin’; to-day you got everything.” This speech clinches, for the reader who prefers the mystical interpretation, the influence of the sculptured Jesus. To the non-mystical reader, this logic alone is satisfactory: loss of job had meant an unconscious spur, the spur of desperation, with unanticipated success.) What is the sequel to the day’s success which marks Miss Willett’s continued interest in the face behind the green-slatted window? State in order the steps leading to the discovery. What is the climax of action? Does it constitute a surprise for the reader as for Miss Willett? What is the dénouement? With the dénouement, dawns the realization of what underlying theme?
The Main Character. According to the mystical interpretation the chief character is the sculptured figure. Otherwise, Miss Willett is the principal. According to the two interpretations, the two become active and passive, reciprocally.
What is the fundamental impression you receive of Miss Willett’s physical person? What, to a writer, is the advantage in choosing a very large or very small person as a main character? Recall classic examples. Note all references to Miss Willett’s big blondeness, and study the economy with which she is kept before the reader.
Details. Where is the gray kitten first mentioned? What is the value, to the plot, of this introduction?
Glance over the narrative for words of color, light, and sound. Which are predominant? The effect on the story and on its verisimilitude? Color-value of the red geranium with its single flower? Value for effect of reality?
Study the easy manner in which the setting is given to the reader.