Wrong. One learns to like some students, of whom there are too few upon the campus. Others I dislike, and of these there are too many.
Better. One learns to like some students, of whom there are too few upon the campus. Others one dislikes, and of these there are too many.
214. Avoid an inconsistent change in tense within the paragraph.
Wrong. My flower garden in June is a most interesting and beautiful sight. On a bright sunny morning one would stop in amazement; the flowers were so happy when the sun reached their faces, still wet with dew, that they fairly sparkled.
Better. My flower garden in June is a most interesting and beautiful sight. On a bright sunny morning one stops in amazement; the flowers are so happy when the sun reaches their faces, still wet with dew, that they fairly sparkle.
215. Avoid an inconsistent change in voice within the paragraph.
Wrong. His directions were brief and to the point. Every question I asked was answered by just the information I desired—no more, no less. When dictating he used only the simplest words. All inquiries in letters were answered plainly.
Better. His directions were brief and to the point. He answered my questions with just the information I desired—no more, no less. When dictating he used only the simplest words and always answered plainly all inquiries in letters.
216. Avoid an inconsistent change in mood within the paragraph.