“much pitying the before-unheard of death of so excellent a queen” delete first of.
“what estate the castle was against the beseigers” to besiegers.
“the fates reserved so great a blessing in store” to Fates.
“begging what goodness solicites you to grant” to solicits.
“and the ill-bought quiet of an ignominous peace” to ignominious.
“This kingdom of Argus, wherein you are,” to Argos.
“the fates must be indulgent to your youth and beauty” to Fates.
“with a down-cast look, which sorrow excused” to downcast.
“Sweet link of hearts, joy’s surest anchor hold,” to anchor-hold.
“Man still complains upon his state to lowre,” to lower.