Eurog wedd is no great compliment to a fair woman; for Gwen, a Flavia, loves to be called white; and the last line hath gar—gar, therefore I would write thus, or the like:
Oni roi, Gwen îr ei gwedd,
Yn gywrain, ryw drugaredd.
But I do not like îr ei gwedd.
Af i graig fwyaf o grêd
Y môr, i gael ymwared,
Ag o’r graig fawr i’r eigion
Dygaf gyrch i dyrch y dòn—
An excellent expression—
Ag o’r dòn egr hyd annwfn
Af ar y dafl i fôr dwfn.
Here is a charming opening for you, to describe the country you go to, and the wonders of the deep; and something like the following lines might be inserted:
Lle mae’r morfil friwfil fron,
A’r enwog fôrforwynian,
To proceed:
A fynno Gwen ysplennydd
Yn ddiau o’m rhwymau ’n rhydd,
Ni chaf gur, ni chaf garu
Na phoen gwn, na hoffi ’n gu;
Ni roddaf gam i dramwy,
I gred i’th ymweled mwy:
Dyna’r modd dan wir i mi,
A dyr unwaith drueni.